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6/23/08 Haiku Spree #15
softly ticking clocks
play their gentle melody
putting me at ease
Originally posted 2008-06-23 21:03:00. Republished by Blog Post Promoter
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you have the idea of haiku but you use too many adjectives…
perhaps this haiku could read like this:
the clock ticks
a melody–
i’m at ease
or something like that… there are many places on the net that can help you with this form… and btw… it doesn’t have to be 5-7-5, the above is acceptable in haiku…
thanks for visiting my blog, i appreciate.