Comments on: Fiction Friday #161

By: Kieran Rollin

Kieran Rollin — Tue, 29 Jun 2010 15:14:52 +0000

I love the description of the beach! It captures it beautifully and with realism – makes me want to go. Also the little shift in tension from the short dialogue is done well. Nice story

By: Adam Byatt

Adam Byatt — Sat, 26 Jun 2010 07:33:57 +0000

It sounds like a great place to visit. Must get myself there sometime.
The last line is a great description.
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By: Chris Chartrand

Chris Chartrand — Fri, 25 Jun 2010 22:38:41 +0000

Ahh, what’s better than Margaritaville. Exploding volcanoes, margaritas, cheeseburgers. I love it. Sounds like you had fun writing this one. I’d listen to the parrot too. Always trust someone with a birds-eye view.
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By: Scott

Scott — Fri, 25 Jun 2010 14:40:26 +0000

Nice story. I liked the suspense toward the end – not only who was saying to move but why. At the end I wanted to read/know what was going to happen next.
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By: Laura Rachel Fox

Laura Rachel Fox — Fri, 25 Jun 2010 13:19:32 +0000

Great story. I enjoyed your description of your trip to Panama City Beach. I’m assuming the fiction begins with the telepathic parrot?

There’s lots of room for expansion here. I’d love a description of the restaurant and the food.
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