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Fiction Friday #155

After a long hiatus from participating in Fiction Fridays, I’ve decided to start playing again. I didn’t quit for any reason in particular; just been busy and a lot of the topics really didn’t interest me. At any rate, this week’s Fiction Friday challenge is to include the phrase “I knew it was a mistake the moment it was over.” somewhere in the story. And this is what I came up with!

I miss my Jeremy – I really do. I miss the way he ran his fingers through my hair when I was sad; the way his palm gently brushed my ear, like I was being kissed by a butterfly. He had a way of making everything better when he caressed me like that. I miss the way he would look at me from across the room; they way he paid attention to me like I was the only woman in the world. He made me feel beautiful. I miss his laughter; the way his boisterous cackling made the room brighter and lifted peoples’ spirits. He was always the life of the party, wherever we went. If ever I was having a bad day, I would only have to hear his laughter and my world would become a happier place. I miss Jeremy’s body; the body gym rats long to have; the body all women desire; the body one gets paid to exhibit. Running my fingers over his stomach, feeling the washboard, turned me on like nothing else. What I miss the most though is the sex. The man made love to me in ways that would make Don Juan ask for lessons.
I know Jeremy loved me; loved me so much he killed for me. A couple years after Donnie Sunderland raped me, I made the off-handed comment that I wanted him dead. Little did I know Jeremy would actually do it. At the time, he seemed to have shrugged it off – he just held me close and whispered his love into my ear.
Jeremy wrote me from prison a few months ago. As much as I love him, living without him has been a living nightmare. I have tried – honestly I have – but being separated the way we are just doesn’t make for a very sound relationship. I sat down and wrote him; I wrote him long. I explained my position in the matter – I broke up with him – and mailed it. Letter after letter arrived after that. He wrote of things I never knew he could feel; the man I was reading wasn’t the same man I fell in love with all those years ago. In his last correspondence, he threw the cliché if I can’t have you, no one can routine. I never knew what darkness resided in the man until I read those last few letters.
I knew it was a mistake the moment it was over. Today I went to Karey’s Sporting Goods, bought a revolver, and enrolled in a training class. Jeremy gets paroled in six weeks. I fear he’s coming home.

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6 Responses to "Fiction Friday #155"

  1. Uncle Tee says:

    Good, dark story…I liked it. I was wondering as I read it where the prompt would pop in. Nice job.

    Mine:
    http://uncleteebooks.blogspot.com/2010/05/fiction-friday-may-14-2010.html

  2. Shelli says:

    I love a good creepy ending! I agree, I thought this was a fun prompt today. So many possible mistakes! It’s been fun to read, too. Good story.
    .-= Shelli´s last blog ..Mistaken =-.

  3. Wow, that was really interesting. I got sucked into it thinking she’d be so happy with this man. Writing romance I find it fascinating because many of those passionate love affairs in real life do end dramatically involving the law. And my job is to romanticize that passion :) There definitely are two sides of every coin.
    Bravo
    Eileen

  4. Walt says:

    I like the dark twist in the story. Seeing Jeremy go from being deeply loved to deeply feared really drove the story home for me. Excellent piece
    .-= Walt´s last blog ..Fiction Friday #155 – A Shiver in the Darkness =-.

  5. I like the turn of events. I thought this was going to be a real love story, but it turned dark quickly. Disturbing turn of events, but the pay off is nice. It’s sad that such an amazing love could go so horribly wrong.

    I’d like to read those letters and see Jeremy’s progression from doting to obsession.

  6. Adam Byatt says:

    You can easily see the depth of the relationship behind the characters, and have questions unanswered, making them complex and distinct.
    .-= Adam Byatt´s last blog ..Comic Superhero =-.

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